Character and plot
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Character and plot
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Thank you for your comments. I hope you find the characters more interesting in Book-2! I'm working on that. ?DB44 wrote:I thought the plot was well done. However, I found the characters very one-dimensional for the most part and simply did not care about them.
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Agreed. The plot was very well done and was unique.DB44 wrote:I thought the plot was well done. However, I found the characters very one-dimensional for the most part and simply did not care about them.

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This is all very helpful, thank you all so much!Gnome wrote:I agree that the plot was gripping and the reason it only took me a few hours to read the book. For the amount of time spent with the characters I felt that I would not be able to tell characters apart if I were asked to.
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I agree with everyone else on this topic that the characters were sorely lacking. I appreciate that Asa became more developed as the story went on. But I found it very difficult to relate to any of the main characters, because it didn't seem like they were real life people. I find that people mess up and are confused about their feelings, and they push people away. Nothing is as simple as these people love each other and nothing ever goes wrong or gets messy and confusing. But I did think the plot was interesting. I thought it was original and was captivating enough to pull me in, despite my feelings about the characters.DB44 wrote:I thought the plot was well done. However, I found the characters very one-dimensional for the most part and simply did not care about them.
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This was put very nicely. I also found the characters hard to relate to and one-dimensional. However, I have a feeling that we will be getting to know the crew much better as the series continues. Also, like Rachel1019 has said the plot was intriguing and original, so kudos for that!Rachel1019 wrote:I agree with everyone else on this topic that the characters were sorely lacking. I appreciate that Asa became more developed as the story went on. But I found it very difficult to relate to any of the main characters, because it didn't seem like they were real life people. I find that people mess up and are confused about their feelings, and they push people away. Nothing is as simple as these people love each other and nothing ever goes wrong or gets messy and confusing. But I did think the plot was interesting. I thought it was original and was captivating enough to pull me in, despite my feelings about the characters.DB44 wrote:I thought the plot was well done. However, I found the characters very one-dimensional for the most part and simply did not care about them.

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Thank you! I am trying to fatten the characters up in the rewrite. I hope you check out the second release of this book. I'm putting a lot of work into it with my new editor!hsimone wrote:This was put very nicely. I also found the characters hard to relate to and one-dimensional. However, I have a feeling that we will be getting to know the crew much better as the series continues. Also, like Rachel1019 has said the plot was intriguing and original, so kudos for that!Rachel1019 wrote:I agree with everyone else on this topic that the characters were sorely lacking. I appreciate that Asa became more developed as the story went on. But I found it very difficult to relate to any of the main characters, because it didn't seem like they were real life people. I find that people mess up and are confused about their feelings, and they push people away. Nothing is as simple as these people love each other and nothing ever goes wrong or gets messy and confusing. But I did think the plot was interesting. I thought it was original and was captivating enough to pull me in, despite my feelings about the characters.DB44 wrote:I thought the plot was well done. However, I found the characters very one-dimensional for the most part and simply did not care about them.
Yes! They are all in Book-2, as well as the books that follow!
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Also, I can't wait to see the gang again in Book 2!
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I think it will flow better and it will be a lot tighter; of course the errors are being addressed. It has really helped gathering all of the feedback from this book club. The information is invaluable and I appreciate it very much!hsimone wrote:Awesome! I'd definitely be interested in the rewrite!
Also, I can't wait to see the gang again in Book 2!
Book-2 will come out after the second release now. I want to get Book-1 right first! ☺
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That makes a lot of sense. I think it's great when an author takes feedback positively and applies it in their writing. It makes the reader's voice that much stronger and appreciate the author's work even more, so thank you for that.Janetleighgreen wrote:I think it will flow better and it will be a lot tighter; of course the errors are being addressed. It has really helped gathering all of the feedback from this book club. The information is invaluable and I appreciate it very much!hsimone wrote:Awesome! I'd definitely be interested in the rewrite!
Also, I can't wait to see the gang again in Book 2!
Book-2 will come out after the second release now. I want to get Book-1 right first! ☺

Can't wait to give it a read!
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