What do you think could enhance the book?
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Re: What do you think could enhance the book?
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Language was a little complex too.
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It is always helpful when a book's world building is properly developed without overwhelming the reader and definitely a map will be appreciated!Jay Lu wrote: ↑11 Jan 2024, 17:19 To enhance "The Great Migration: Book One" by Steve Ramirez, consider simplifying the initial complexity for easier reader engagement, further editing for language refinement, making characters more distinct and memorable, ensuring consistent pacing, delving deeper into underlying themes, and perhaps including visual aids like maps or illustrations. Expanding on the backstory and world-building can also enrich the reader's immersion in this fantasy world.
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I think what could enhance the book is the scene in the beginning of the book. The scene opened up to dead bodies everywhere in the camp. I thought a good flashback would have been great to eliminate the immediate questions I was asking myself. For example, who attacked the camp and why? I had so many other questions as well.