Loyalty

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afaf yasin
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Loyalty

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Once upon a time there were two friends who promised each other to stay loyal with each other. One day they decided to go for a picnic and on their way one of them found some coins. He was thinking why shouldn't I hide it? The other was thinking about their food that what to eat. The boy who was hiding the coins were feeling guilty, so he decided to share the truth. So, he spoke the truth about the coins. The other boy was amazed. Then they planned to buy some food with those coins. Moral: loyalty is priceless.
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Loyalty is a priceless gem and once you receive it you should thoroughly cherish it. Such qualities whether from a relationship or friendship are so much better of reciprocated. But unfortunately that's not how life works.
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afaf yasin wrote: 28 May 2024, 18:34 Once upon a time there were two friends who promised each other to stay loyal with each other. One day they decided to go for a picnic and on their way one of them found some coins. He was thinking why shouldn't I hide it? The other was thinking about their food that what to eat. The boy who was hiding the coins were feeling guilty, so he decided to share the truth. So, he spoke the truth about the coins. The other boy was amazed. Then they planned to buy some food with those coins. Moral: loyalty is priceless.
Afaf, nice short story. Loyalty is priceless but the cost can be high at times. Loyalty must be reciprocal. :techie-studyinggray:
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The basis of a relationship is loyalty, nothing can work without that. Nice short story, I like the ending.
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See, it doesn't cost anything to be loyal. Why do people have to have transactional style friendships instead of genuine ones?
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