I AM DIFFERENT FROM YOU

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Peter Greaven
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I AM DIFFERENT FROM YOU

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You ain’t gon see me moving crazy like the way that you do

Cause I don’t smoke from the same pipe you do

—that makes you walk around like a zombie on voodoo

I’ve got a copyright on my cruise,my sh*t’s not for you

It’s quality, it’s classy and wrapped in backwood

But it’s the stench that brought the cops to your hood

But we’ve know not to snitch in the hood

We’re not from the class of the rattus rattus

I be sharing the bread, cause I’m the head at the table

And everything’s in control, since I ended the troubles

I called you nemesis to give you recognition

I’m forever the nightmare you lose your dreams to


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Post by Rose dany »

Hello,
Do you mind me if I share the reverse of your poem?

Maze
Open your eyes
It's getting too late
Open and be wise
I really care
Think vividly
Time is a guest
See it clearly
Life is a jerk
Regrets will eat me
If I rest
Burdens grow in me
If I fail the test
How long can I go
Before I burst.

If you mind I will delete it. I just want to share.
Regards,
Fellow beginner reviewer
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Post by Qwerty Writes »

It's amazing! I loved the flow of the verses and the deep meaning behind those words. It really is amazing. I wondered about the interpretation though. May I know more about it? :eusa-think:
Peter Greaven wrote: 27 Oct 2024, 20:54 You ain’t gon see me moving crazy like the way that you do

Cause I don’t smoke from the same pipe you do

—that makes you walk around like a zombie on voodoo

I’ve got a copyright on my cruise,my sh*t’s not for you

It’s quality, it’s classy and wrapped in backwood

But it’s the stench that brought the cops to your hood

But we’ve know not to snitch in the hood

We’re not from the class of the rattus rattus

I be sharing the bread, cause I’m the head at the table

And everything’s in control, since I ended the troubles

I called you nemesis to give you recognition

I’m forever the nightmare you lose your dreams to


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