Mother

Charlie19 · Post by **Charlie19** » 27 Jun 2019, 22:03

this best suits for the mother's day celebration.. i loved the emotion.. i loved the composition.. good job

Post by **Alys Sterk** » 03 Jul 2019, 12:18

I think you should make it beautiful by painting it, or using calligraphy and give it to her.

Very nice.

Abhishek Devkota · Post by **Abhishek Devkota** » 05 Jul 2019, 22:58

Heart touching poem, strong words
Mother is the path maker of our lives,
She is the person solve our every difficulties. The poem tickled the truth of this world, mother

Ekta Swarnkar · Post by **Ekta Swarnkar** » 19 Sep 2019, 11:15

Jlprince26 wrote: ↑06 Jun 2019, 12:37
Eclecticmama wrote: ↑05 Jun 2019, 11:24 As a mother I have felt all of these things, plus some. I only pray one day my kids grow to appreciate me as you do with your mom. Great poem
I concur with you. As mothers, we can only hope we influence our children in the best way possible by showing them as much love and support as possible. Hoping one day they will appreciate all we do, even if as youngsters, they can't stand us! Love the poem. Short and to the point. I think it is a wonderful depiction of how much you love and appreciate your mother.

Thanks very much!

Ekta Swarnkar · Post by **Ekta Swarnkar** » 19 Sep 2019, 11:16

Ataylor1997 wrote: ↑06 Jun 2019, 17:48 Your poem is beautiful and very informative yet simple way of describing a dedicated mother <3

Thanks for sharing your views!

Ekta Swarnkar · Post by **Ekta Swarnkar** » 19 Sep 2019, 11:20

ayemi_chan wrote: ↑07 Jun 2019, 00:55 Ummm, its a great poem nevertheless but it could use more improvement, I think you should make it into two stanzas or even make it three, the first one talking all about the things your mother did for you and the second one would be more of a brief message, ang maybe you can omit the lines the talk about laundry and just make it one with the line that starts with maid. There's also some mis used prepositions and you could also elaborate it more because for me I think this is an unfinshed poem or something that left me hanging.

Though this poem is really sweet and you will sure know that it is made from the heart.❤❤

Honestly, I am not a poet it was just in my mind and I thought maybe I should write it. Thanks for the valuable tips. I will try to improve it. Thanks once again for reading it.

Ekta Swarnkar · Post by **Ekta Swarnkar** » 19 Sep 2019, 11:27

Nisha Ward wrote: ↑07 Jun 2019, 08:01 I liked this. It's short and clear and to the point but it's full of feeling. My only issue is that it really could have been more than one stanza, but that's personal preference.

Thanks for reading it.

Ekta Swarnkar · Post by **Ekta Swarnkar** » 19 Sep 2019, 11:28

Charlie19 wrote: ↑27 Jun 2019, 22:03 this best suits for the mother's day celebration.. i loved the emotion.. i loved the composition.. good job

Well, I hope your mother likes it on Mother's Day. Thanks!

Ekta Swarnkar · Post by **Ekta Swarnkar** » 19 Sep 2019, 11:31

Kansas City Teacher wrote: ↑03 Jul 2019, 12:18 I think you should make it beautiful by painting it, or using calligraphy and give it to her. Very nice.

Thanks for the amazing ideas, I'm sure she is going to kiss me on my cheek❤
Thanks for reading it.

Ekta Swarnkar · Post by **Ekta Swarnkar** » 19 Sep 2019, 11:33

Abhishek Devkota wrote: ↑05 Jul 2019, 22:58 Heart touching poem, strong words
Mother is the path maker of our lives,
She is the person solve our every difficulties. The poem tickled the truth of this world, mother

Truth!
Thanks for the comment.

Ashley Louise · Post by **Ashley Louise** » 19 Sep 2019, 12:41

This is very sweet and beautiful!

Well done!

Ekta Swarnkar · Post by **Ekta Swarnkar** » 19 Sep 2019, 22:39

Ashley Louise wrote: ↑19 Sep 2019, 12:41 This is very sweet and beautiful! Well done!

Thank you so much!

Georgephilips · Post by **Georgephilips** » 10 Oct 2020, 20:59

Ekta Swarnkar wrote: ↑23 May 2019, 05:34 [amazon=] Hi everyone, I have a poem to share and I hope it connects to your lives as it connected to mine, please let me know if you liked it and how can I modify it.

She is a machine producing love,
a chef making food,
a teacher helping homework,
a best friend to share everything,
a maid cleaning rooms,
a counselor boosting morale,
a laundry doing clothes,
an advisor of my problems,
a clock waking me up in time,
and a forever happy person to look upon all my queries without being paid,
Who is she, may be a random person to the world,
but she is my mother,
MY WORLD.[/amazon]

Nice piece! A reminder of how awesome mothers are. Thank you!