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Getting used to of being used

Posted: 26 Feb 2020, 03:01
by bellajavier
Hello! This is a poem I wrote some time ago. Please share your views!

Swimming in an ocean,
held my head under water,
and drowned,
almost,
did it again,
this I could breathe,
but started choking again,
and I did it again,
had better stamina,
but after a minute,
breathing left my lungs,
no matter how many times I tried,
I couldn't immunize,
myself against
drowning
and against death.

-What a heartbreak feels every time

Re: Getting used to of being used

Posted: 07 May 2020, 10:25
by Samwisekoop
Great work! I love how harshly you depicted how heartbreaks feel. Water is always such a good metaphoric substance to use in poetry.