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Owned by a Cat

He yawns and stretches
Curls into a ball
Snoozes some more
Kneading his giant paws
Swaddled in blankets
Owning the loveseat
Surveys his kingdom
He summons me
I am honored
To be of service.


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Inspiration by ML

Silence comforts
Phone is silent
Jays are squawking
Sun is shining
Rain is pending
Cats are purring
Coffee fragrant
Shawl is soothing
Fire is snapping
Pen is silent
Mind is churning
Sigh is forming
Focus dwindling
Will prose now rise
From verdant fields ?

-- 21 Apr 2014, 00:51 --

feedback welcomed!

Love the images these poems evoke particularly the second one. I hesitate to criticize as I could not do as well myself but I just find the verdant fields line jars the poem a little. Something softer perhaps would have been a gentler conclusion. Well done anyway, they are lovely poems.

Thank you, lulumoon1940! Your comments are welcomed. Interesting note-I wrote these poems about 2 weeks ago and others had similar feelings about my last line, too. I always listen and/or read feedback and sometimes edit accordingly.

Interesting about the last line that others had the same feeling. Thank you for your reply.

Cats are some of the world's funniest creatures, aren't they? I've never owned one, but I've heard it's a delight to have one around. I thought your poem on yours was witty and adorable. I'd have liked to have seen a little more of him there on the couch, colors and such. It would have added to the flavor of the piece. I'd like to admire your furry imp in all his glory.

As for the second one, I think the ending was an interesting choice. To make it work better, perhaps you could add a little more to the rest of the poem, varying the lines a little more, though not too much. I enjoyed the fact that you wrote the poem as the passing of a moment, and it should be kept that way.

I'm glad to have read your work, mland2000. Have any more poems? I'd love to see them. I'm quite the poetry buff... I'm always ready to devour something new.