FEEDBACK WANTED! Poem that I wrote.

[Cnc_theft_auto]

Hi.

I just wanted an opinion on this poem that I wrote. It is just mediocre, but I still want an opinion.

Thanks.

Kittens

As the sun sets,
Way off in the west,
All of my pets,
Play with such zest.
I watch my cats
Jump around a lot,
I watch my cats
And I disturb them not.
I watch them fight,
And it’s all in good fun,
I watch ‘til the night,
When the day is done.

[Lisafees]

Inspired an emotion !

[Cnc_theft_auto]

Inspired an emotion !

Thanks Lisa

[Aileenhu]

That's good. It captured the essence.

And the rhyming is even better!

[Nabaa]

i like it i just wanna ask you how old r you ?

[Cnc_theft_auto]

i like it i just wanna ask you how old r you ?

I'm 13, 14 in less than 3 weeks, but wrote that when I was 12.