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Posted: **28 Mar 2011, 00:55**

Hi.

I just wanted an opinion on this poem that I wrote. It is just mediocre, but I still want an opinion.

Thanks.

Kittens

As the sun sets,
Way off in the west,
All of my pets,
Play with such zest.
I watch my cats
Jump around a lot,
I watch my cats
And I disturb them not.
I watch them fight,
And it’s all in good fun,
I watch ‘til the night,
When the day is done.

Posted: **25 Apr 2011, 18:56**

Inspired an emotion !

Posted: **25 Apr 2011, 19:49**

Lisafees wrote:Inspired an emotion !

Thanks Lisa

Posted: **26 Apr 2011, 02:59**

That's good. It captured the essence.

And the rhyming is even better!

Posted: **26 Apr 2011, 05:22**

i like it i just wanna ask you how old r you ?

Posted: **26 Apr 2011, 05:27**

Nabaa wrote:i like it i just wanna ask you how old r you ?

I'm 13, 14 in less than 3 weeks, but wrote that when I was 12.

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