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Please, admin, one editor marked my review, and I feel he was incorrect about the suggested error. The original and the editor's comments will be posted below.

I want you to help me check it before requesting an editor recheck and an admin recheck (I have only one more admin recheck left).

Original post:
Its purpose is to empower readers in navigating the complex world of healthcare.

I appreciate the author’s inclusion of her family’s story, providing valuable lessons for readers.

Editor Comments:
Its purpose is to empower readers [in navigating](to navigate) the complex world of healthcare.

I appreciate the author’s inclusion of her family’s story, [providing](which provides) valuable lessons for readers.
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Ogunkoya Mayowa wrote: 25 Jun 2023, 16:50 Please, admin, one editor marked my review, and I feel he was incorrect about the suggested error. The original and the editor's comments will be posted below.

I want you to help me check it before requesting an editor recheck and an admin recheck (I have only one more admin recheck left).

Original post:
Its purpose is to empower readers in navigating the complex world of healthcare.

I appreciate the author’s inclusion of her family’s story, providing valuable lessons for readers.

Editor Comments:
Its purpose is to empower readers [in navigating](to navigate) the complex world of healthcare.

I appreciate the author’s inclusion of her family’s story, [providing](which provides) valuable lessons for readers.
Hi,
I’m not an admin, but I will gladly give you my thoughts on this.

#1 Its purpose is to empower readers [in navigating](to navigate) the complex world of healthcare.
Either an infinitive (the suggestion) or participle (what was originally written) is acceptable in the first sentence. I would consider this a stylistic difference and not an objective error. The Purdue OWL link below lists instances where one is preferred over the other, but this is not a case that is highlighted either way.
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writ ... tives.html

#2 I appreciate the author’s inclusion of her family’s story, [providing](which provides) valuable lessons for readers.
The suggestion in parentheses changes the meaning of the sentence slightly. The way it was originally written implied you appreciated that the author provided valuable lessons by including her family’s story. The comma preceding the participial phrase at the end of the sentence showed that it referred to a noun earlier in the sentence. The suggestion implies the story provided valuable lessons, not the author: the “which” clause appears to be a nonessential dependent clause describing “story.” Either option is acceptable—it depends on your intended meaning. Again, I would consider this a stylistic difference and not an objective error. The following Purdue OWL link contains information to support your usage in this sentence.
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writ ... iples.html

I think you have a case, but only you can decide if it’s worth the risk of losing an editor recheck and possibly an admin recheck. Be sure to thoroughly explain why you think it is written correctly and provide reference links. As you know, you don’t have the opportunity to add to your recheck request if you decide to go for an admin recheck, so it is very important that the initial recheck request is thorough and complete.

All the best!
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MsH2k wrote: 26 Jun 2023, 16:29
Ogunkoya Mayowa wrote: 25 Jun 2023, 16:50 Please, admin, one editor marked my review, and I feel he was incorrect about the suggested error. The original and the editor's comments will be posted below.

I want you to help me check it before requesting an editor recheck and an admin recheck (I have only one more admin recheck left).

Original post:
Its purpose is to empower readers in navigating the complex world of healthcare.

I appreciate the author’s inclusion of her family’s story, providing valuable lessons for readers.

Editor Comments:
Its purpose is to empower readers [in navigating](to navigate) the complex world of healthcare.

I appreciate the author’s inclusion of her family’s story, [providing](which provides) valuable lessons for readers.
Hi,
I’m not an admin, but I will gladly give you my thoughts on this.

#1 Its purpose is to empower readers [in navigating](to navigate) the complex world of healthcare.
Either an infinitive (the suggestion) or participle (what was originally written) is acceptable in the first sentence. I would consider this a stylistic difference and not an objective error. The Purdue OWL link below lists instances where one is preferred over the other, but this is not a case that is highlighted either way.
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writ ... tives.html

#2 I appreciate the author’s inclusion of her family’s story, [providing](which provides) valuable lessons for readers.
The suggestion in parentheses changes the meaning of the sentence slightly. The way it was originally written implied you appreciated that the author provided valuable lessons by including her family’s story. The comma preceding the participial phrase at the end of the sentence showed that it referred to a noun earlier in the sentence. The suggestion implies the story provided valuable lessons, not the author: the “which” clause appears to be a nonessential dependent clause describing “story.” Either option is acceptable—it depends on your intended meaning. Again, I would consider this a stylistic difference and not an objective error. The following Purdue OWL link contains information to support your usage in this sentence.
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writ ... iples.html

I think you have a case, but only you can decide if it’s worth the risk of losing an editor recheck and possibly an admin recheck. Be sure to thoroughly explain why you think it is written correctly and provide reference links. As you know, you don’t have the opportunity to add to your recheck request if you decide to go for an admin recheck, so it is very important that the initial recheck request is thorough and complete.

All the best!
Thanks very much for this information.
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MsH2k wrote: 26 Jun 2023, 16:29
Ogunkoya Mayowa wrote: 25 Jun 2023, 16:50 Please, admin, one editor marked my review, and I feel he was incorrect about the suggested error. The original and the editor's comments will be posted below.

I want you to help me check it before requesting an editor recheck and an admin recheck (I have only one more admin recheck left).

Original post:
Its purpose is to empower readers in navigating the complex world of healthcare.

I appreciate the author’s inclusion of her family’s story, providing valuable lessons for readers.

Editor Comments:
Its purpose is to empower readers [in navigating](to navigate) the complex world of healthcare.

I appreciate the author’s inclusion of her family’s story, [providing](which provides) valuable lessons for readers.
Hi,
I’m not an admin, but I will gladly give you my thoughts on this.

#1 Its purpose is to empower readers [in navigating](to navigate) the complex world of healthcare.
Either an infinitive (the suggestion) or participle (what was originally written) is acceptable in the first sentence. I would consider this a stylistic difference and not an objective error. The Purdue OWL link below lists instances where one is preferred over the other, but this is not a case that is highlighted either way.
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writ ... tives.html

#2 I appreciate the author’s inclusion of her family’s story, [providing](which provides) valuable lessons for readers.
The suggestion in parentheses changes the meaning of the sentence slightly. The way it was originally written implied you appreciated that the author provided valuable lessons by including her family’s story. The comma preceding the participial phrase at the end of the sentence showed that it referred to a noun earlier in the sentence. The suggestion implies the story provided valuable lessons, not the author: the “which” clause appears to be a nonessential dependent clause describing “story.” Either option is acceptable—it depends on your intended meaning. Again, I would consider this a stylistic difference and not an objective error. The following Purdue OWL link contains information to support your usage in this sentence.
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writ ... iples.html

I think you have a case, but only you can decide if it’s worth the risk of losing an editor recheck and possibly an admin recheck. Be sure to thoroughly explain why you think it is written correctly and provide reference links. As you know, you don’t have the opportunity to add to your recheck request if you decide to go for an admin recheck, so it is very important that the initial recheck request is thorough and complete.

All the best!
Please, what about in this case

Editor Comments:
that readers might find surprising, including a pale complexion, (a)dry mouth, sleep

emphasizes the importance of exercise in(for) stress relief and
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Ogunkoya Mayowa wrote: 26 Jun 2023, 16:44
Please, what about in this case

Editor Comments:
that readers might find surprising, including a pale complexion, (a)dry mouth, sleep

emphasizes the importance of exercise in(for) stress relief and
In the first example, without the context of the full sentence, it’s hard to know if the article "a" is required or not.

Regarding the second example, I have trouble with prepositions too. I use several grammar checkers when I edit my review, and if the preposition I use is flagged by any of the grammar checkers, I look up the meaning of both prepositions (mine and the one suggested) to see which one better represents my intention. In this case, “in” is generally used for a location and “for” is used to show purpose, so it seems that “for” would be preferable.
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MsH2k wrote: 27 Jun 2023, 19:26
Ogunkoya Mayowa wrote: 26 Jun 2023, 16:44
Please, what about in this case

Editor Comments:
that readers might find surprising, including a pale complexion, (a)dry mouth, sleep

emphasizes the importance of exercise in(for) stress relief and
In the first example, without the context of the full sentence, it’s hard to know if the article "a" is required or not.

Regarding the second example, I have trouble with prepositions too. I use several grammar checkers when I edit my review, and if the preposition I use is flagged by any of the grammar checkers, I look up the meaning of both prepositions (mine and the one suggested) to see which one better represents my intention. In this case, “in” is generally used for a location and “for” is used to show purpose, so it seems that “for” would be preferable.
Thanks a lot for this.
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MsH2k wrote: 27 Jun 2023, 19:26
Ogunkoya Mayowa wrote: 26 Jun 2023, 16:44
Please, what about in this case

Editor Comments:
that readers might find surprising, including a pale complexion, (a)dry mouth, sleep

emphasizes the importance of exercise in(for) stress relief and
In the first example, without the context of the full sentence, it’s hard to know if the article "a" is required or not.

Regarding the second example, I have trouble with prepositions too. I use several grammar checkers when I edit my review, and if the preposition I use is flagged by any of the grammar checkers, I look up the meaning of both prepositions (mine and the one suggested) to see which one better represents my intention. In this case, “in” is generally used for a location and “for” is used to show purpose, so it seems that “for” would be preferable.
Please, did you know any guide on how to choose “a” or “an” in a sentence, just like that above.
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Ogunkoya Mayowa wrote: 27 Jun 2023, 22:47
MsH2k wrote: 27 Jun 2023, 19:26
Ogunkoya Mayowa wrote: 26 Jun 2023, 16:44
Please, what about in this case

Editor Comments:
that readers might find surprising, including a pale complexion, (a)dry mouth, sleep

emphasizes the importance of exercise in(for) stress relief and
In the first example, without the context of the full sentence, it’s hard to know if the article "a" is required or not.

Regarding the second example, I have trouble with prepositions too. I use several grammar checkers when I edit my review, and if the preposition I use is flagged by any of the grammar checkers, I look up the meaning of both prepositions (mine and the one suggested) to see which one better represents my intention. In this case, “in” is generally used for a location and “for” is used to show purpose, so it seems that “for” would be preferable.
Please, did you know any guide on how to choose “a” or “an” in a sentence, just like that above.
I don’t know of anything specific for this instance except for being consistent when listing items in a series. If you use several grammar checkers, they may highlight different suggestions/errors. It is always best to evaluate each issue highlighted and not accept it blindly. This post has some other tips too:
viewtopic.php?p=2180995#p2180995
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MsH2k wrote: 28 Jun 2023, 13:11
Ogunkoya Mayowa wrote: 27 Jun 2023, 22:47
MsH2k wrote: 27 Jun 2023, 19:26

In the first example, without the context of the full sentence, it’s hard to know if the article "a" is required or not.

Regarding the second example, I have trouble with prepositions too. I use several grammar checkers when I edit my review, and if the preposition I use is flagged by any of the grammar checkers, I look up the meaning of both prepositions (mine and the one suggested) to see which one better represents my intention. In this case, “in” is generally used for a location and “for” is used to show purpose, so it seems that “for” would be preferable.
Please, did you know any guide on how to choose “a” or “an” in a sentence, just like that above.
I don’t know of anything specific for this instance except for being consistent when listing items in a series. If you use several grammar checkers, they may highlight different suggestions/errors. It is always best to evaluate each issue highlighted and not accept it blindly. This post has some other tips too:
viewtopic.php?p=2180995#p2180995
Thanks very much. I really appreciate.
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