Fire Dance

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Fooxie Darkbloom
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Fire Dance

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Red, Orange, Yellow, Blue
Twisting
dancing
reaching up high
grasping at the air
eating everything at their feet
moving freely
out of control
leaving destruction behind
Red, Orange, Yellow, Blue
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Very nice poem, as are the others you submitted! I particularly like this one. It evokes images of Mardi Gras or Bacchanalian festivity despite the destructive nature of the dancers.
“I just got out of the hospital. I was in a speed reading accident. I hit a book mark and flew across the room.”
― Steven Wright
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thank you :) The dancers are flames ;)
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